Rain
I wish to feel the rain.
Feel the blissful cool.
Splattering heavily against my brow.
The windshield prevents this, clouded with steam.
I see two lights, fast approaching.
I swerve to avoid them.
Too late.
Tearing metal.
A screech of protesting brakes.
The world suddenly spinning.
Shattering glass.
A flash of red.
Copper musk in the air.
Darkness.
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Flashing red and blue lights.
Distant voices.
Blood on the steering wheel.
Blood everywhere.
My blood.
Rain.
Dripping softly in.
Cold.
Numb.
Darkness
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Blinding light.
Pain.
Too much pain.
Distant voices.
Can’t feel my legs.
Gone.
Darkness.
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Whispering voices.
Soft yellow light.
Hard to breathe.
Figures.
Silhouetted in the shadows.
Blurred.
Racking pain.
Voices fading.
Darkness.
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I can see her.
Crying for the last time.
Surrounded.
Angels they are.
Pain.
Too much pain.
Darkness closing in.
Cold.
A final goodbye.
Soothing warmth.
The pain.
Gone.
The rain is there.
Welcoming me home.
Never to be seen.
Memories fade.
Just her and only her.
Darkness.
Forever.
March 8th, 2010 at 4:53 pm
Intresting, but not very original. Sorry.
March 9th, 2010 at 11:20 am
Hi. I’m the author of this piece and I was wondering if you could ellaborate on how my piece is not very original. This is not an attack on you, I just would like dig deeper on this subject.